Sleep, lying in dry river beds
Sold rapidly, buy the shore banks
Brains washed from corporate heads
Dried and neatly styled on fuel tanks
Rippled, ragged breaths of ashen air
Smog saturated sludge and stench
Precipitations drought and bare
Floating plastic water bottles’ island’s quench
External thermostat control is diplomatic
Hemisphere and atmosphere are fastened
Kings and Queens of trepid arid Earth
Dust harvests of genetically modified stock
Fine work, Adam. You really do need to get into Chinese sounds, characters, and even tones to counteract whatever remains…
Lines 11 and 12 do need heavy revision. I would suggest the following, as a way to tighten them up:…
Norman, I very much like the concept of your sonnet, moving from classical masks to the rough equivalent in cyberreality.…
Norman, I like your rhymes, particularly the ending with "odious" and "Janus." Your subject and message are well thought out…
C.B., You have a way of getting to the heart of human nature with a raw honesty that makes me…
There is a sense of the surreal in this poem, and almost like a Dali or Magritte image painted (or in this case expressed) for our imagination, and all wrapped up in an environmental and placement contradiction. I enjoyed it. Thank you.